Comment:
I like how you move back and forth between personal experiences and the texts you are researching.
On level two we'll be looking to see more detailed responses to the texts you are reading. One this document, your quote sandwiches is a good example of the kinds of response to reading we are looking for:
https://docs.google.com/document/pub?id=1R3MRJZynkjdFqI0TiAMoTx-KfYoOLyFc7CjVV27wj6w
Your final essay should get a lot of response. Good work.