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Writing - Notice and Investigate


Analyze the important parts of your sources and draw conclusions about them.

Add “quote sandwhiches” to your writing. Introduce, insert, and interpret three or more quotations from this week’s sources (Text-Dependent Research). Add these to your Doc. Revise, proofread, spell-check, cite, and link to the original source.

Use the Guide from Youth Voices: Adding Quotations

Below are four more versions of the same idea.

Take a look at these, then do it yourself. Add at least three transcriptions and citations from your dialectial notes from your Text-Dependent Research.

When you have finished adding at least three transcriptions and citations into your writing get more feedback from your peers and your teacher. Copy this third or fourth draft of your argument from your Google Doc and paste it into a comment here (on this P2PU task), then click Yes, I'm done 


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Follow this link to a PowerPoint: How to Make a Quote Sandwich.


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http://youtu.be/ZfEZAmxJ5j8


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MAKING A QUOTE SANDWICH
--M. Harutunian, College of the Canyons

Probably not the most appetizing dish ever created, the quote sandwich nevertheless serves a very useful purpose: It helps tie evidence to the main point or thesis. The quote sandwich begins with a very basic ingredient--and introduction:


The introduction is like the top layer of a sandwich; it helps to organize the whole mess. In the introduction to a quote, the writer provides some context and background for the quote. Here is an example:

In discussing the role of movies in shaping the American public's view of the Vietnam War, H. Bruce Franklin makes this telling statement:

Notice that the introduction to this quote gives the reader quite a bit of information. It tells who the quote is by and what its context is.


Once the quote has been introduced, it's time to give the actual quote itself. An important point to remember when quoting is that the quotation marks need to be nearly ignored for punctuation purposes. Read your sentences without the quotation marks. If they don't need punctuation, they will not need them with the quotation marks. Let's see the actual quote now:

In discussing the role of movies in shaping the American public's view of the Vietnam War, H. Bruce Franklin makes this telling statement: "The manipulation of familiar images [about the war]... was blatant, though most critics at the time seemed oblivious to it" (Franklin 860).

In this case the quote is set off by a colon. If it were not, the quote would not begin with a capital letter. Also, note the use of the brackets part way through the quote. The brackets announce either an addition or a change in the quoted material. Here they've been used to clarify the images. Finally, note the use of ellipses (...) to mark deleted materials.


Once the quote is completed, its significance must be explained. Let us say that our main point for this essay was that the media created the public's perception of America's wars. Having given the quote, we would now explain how the quote supports the point:

In discussing the role of movies in shaping the American public's view of the Vietnam War, H. Bruce Franklin makes this telling statement: "The manipulation of familiar images [about the war]... was blatant, though most critics at the time seemed oblivious to it." The manipulation of these images created an image in the minds of most Americans, who now pictured helicopters, the music of Wagner and the Doors, and Russian roulette as substitutes for the reality of the war. The media created a different Vietnam in the minds of Americans.

Note that the explanation for the quote ties it specifically to the unifying element for the essay--the media creates the public's perception of America's wars.


There you have it; one bona fide all-American quote sandwich:

In discussing the role of movies in shaping the American public's view of the Vietnam War, H. Bruce Franklin makes this telling statement: "The manipulation of familiar images [about the war]... was blatant, though most critics at the time seemed oblivious to it." The manipulation of these images created an image in the minds of most Americans, who now pictured helicopters, the music of Wagner and the Doors, and Russian roulette as substitutes for the reality of the war. The media created a different Vietnam in the minds of Americans.

Bon Apetit!


 


Task Discussion


  • Joey Pappas said:

     

              The question I bring to the table, and still am intrigued in, is “what is the attraction to music that’s message is pointless?” There are a few major factors that go into this question; first, I’d say that race relates strongly to the negative, irresponsible, and vulgar music in mainstream.

    Hip hop itself is not the source of violent music.  It is actually the commercialized, bastardized form of hip hop we hear on the radio that serves as the source of shameful lyrical content that teaches young black children to worship material possessions, to disrespect women, to stay high on drugs and alcohol all day, to engage in massive amounts of sexual promiscuity and to celebrate killing one  another.”

    This quote is from thyblackman.com, and is stating a couple different things. One, Hip Hop music is in correlation with black men. I’d say not just black men, but people raised in more urban places, and black people are immense in the cities. Hip Hop now is commercialized and bastardized mostly, and I agree with that statement. I understand that Hip Hop wasn’t rap we know of today, speaking about drugs and alcohol, material possessions, disrespect women, killing one another, and engaging in a lot of sexual promiscuity. Rather, Hip Hop was music that was people’s voice, founded on creative minds that would use rhythm and sounds amazingly and speaking mind on things like struggles of living with tough circumstances like low income, bad neighborhoods, racism, etc, issues that we face. Also good things like getting educated, not doing drugs, speaking out against crimes and problems. Funny how not that long ago, thats how it was. Now however, the music seems to be complete polar opposites of what it once was.

    Content of lyrics reflects on what the artists are thinking and living. If the artist’s lyrical content is full of sex, drugs, money, murder, and disrespect, the artist’s life normal reflects that. However even worse, the fans will follow the artist’s lifestyle, seeing him as a role model. These music artists are direct philosophers of life, in the eyes of the audience who listens.

    “Pop hits have in recent years taken a turn toward emotional ambiguity, aka songs with a mix of happy and sad aspects, like a slower tempo paired with major chords, or faster tempos with minor chords. Those emotionally confused Green Day fans are making more and more sense now, eh?”

    This quote is from fuse.tv. Just as lyrics in music has an impact on a consumer, so does the music itself. If you’re trying to create a suspenseful mood in a scene of a movie, suspenseful music usually will do the trick. Modern music seems to me to be becoming more and more grim by the minute. Hip Hop music is a target most people go for, it’s lyrics and crude music videos; However in another direction, Pop music also has it’s own set of problems.

    Some music is equally crude and really, just depressing. Hip Hop is criminalized and music that falls under the “emo” category is really just a complaint list in the form of a song. But it’s tricky, the music can be really high-energy, and the message, crude and depressing; or vice versa. Confusing? Imagine the audience. Granted adolescence and young adulthood is emotionally confusing time for people, since this is when they find out who they are and want to be, but the music philosophizes to be depressed yet in an angry state, or smile while saying hateful things calmly. Sounds a little insane to me, like the serial killer Dexter Morgan in the Showtime series Dexter.

    “It’s not that I’m choosing to be a gospel rap artist. I’m not trying to do gospel rap, and I’m not trying to make a gospel song. I’m just going through what I’m going through and seeking God through it. Whatever comes out in a song will hopefully identify with people going through it and point them in the direction of Christ because He’s real.”

    This quote is from sojones.com. As I’ve stated before, Music artists are philosophers with an audience wanting to be imitations. But with their philosophies, the morals are clearly shown. Some might say lack there of, or maybe construed, but it’s still very evident. We all have beliefs, even lack of belief is stating you believe there is no belief, in what is the conversation. An atheist is not just some pothead teenager saying everyone is wrong and he/she wants to do what he/she wants to do. An atheist is someone who can prove in fact that there is no God or deity(s). If you find one let me know, because there is not one who has facts, which is what they claim to base their beliefs in disbelief of God and/or deity(s). That’s for another conversation though.

    I feel all music has morals based in the songs since the songs are made by the artists and the artists are people with beliefs like any other. Music needs morals. In my Christian values, I believe they should be in music. Which they are. I think music with morals and values is the right music to be listened to. Heck, even fun music about not crude fun drenched in sex and fame, but real values of fun that can be hanging out with friends enjoying eachothers company playing sports, doing things can be incorporated or feelings of love towards family, people, your spouse or person of interest even not hate. People know exactly what I’m talking about. If music is indulged by consumers and originated from an artist with values and morals appropriate, mature, loving, and fun, then there won’t be issues in music industry.

    However, the music industry is corrupted with evil; hateful messages, telling people to be violent,  disrespectful, hurt people, do drugs, drink alcohol, be extremely promiscuous and engage in a lot of sexual actions. And the people who do this aren’t happy, never will be influenced by this music that’s depressive and crude. I would ask the most sane thing and that is to listen to music that is positive, fun, telling people to love each other, and overcome struggles.
    on Feb. 24, 2013, 10:10 p.m.